How to Weave Story Elements and Avoid Info Dumps

by Jami Gold on March 10, 2016

in Writing Stuff

Garbage can with text: No Info Dumps Allowed

Our stories consist of many elements: dialogue, action, setting, description, internal thought, emotion, visceral reaction, worldbuilding, backstory, etc. Each of those contributes to our story, and none of them are “evil.”

Not even backstory. *smile*

Our stories are stronger for including all of the elements. Yet given my mention of backstory, it’s probably obvious that we can overdo those elements as well.

Information dumps can happen with any aspect of our story. Backstory has a bad reputation from getting cozy with too many info dumps, but it’s not alone.

Too much dialogue in a row can lead to “talking head syndrome,” where readers lose track of the environment around the characters. We’ve recently talked about finding the right balance for settings and descriptions. Too big of a chunk of internal thought can feel like “navel gazing.” Etc., etc.

On the other hand, if we don’t include any backstory, our characters might lack context for their motivations. Backstory—what they’ve experienced and learned (for good or ill) about the world—is often the driving force behind why they do what they do.

In the same way, our stories need the other elements too. They’re all important for creating the tapestry of our story.

No matter what story elements we’re talking about, we need to include them without crossing over into Info Dump Land by using too much. How can we make sure we don’t cross the line? Let’s talk about our options…

Why Is It Important to Avoid Info Dumps?

Information dumps are when we tell readers things we think they need to know, but we’re not sharing the information as part of the story. In other words, an info dump is like pressing pause on the story to give more information.

It’s all fine and good to make sure readers have the information they need to understand the story, but the problem is with that “pressing pause” aspect. Readers come to us for the story, and if we stop the story in its tracks, readers can lose interest. (Backstory and info dumping are one of the top five reasons readers close a book.)

Info dumps can also jar readers out of the story by feeling like an intrusion. Maybe the characters are telling each other things they’d never really say (“As you know, Bob, you’re my brother.”). Maybe we’re inserting our authorial perspective into a deep point-of-view scene. Or maybe we’re spoon-feeding information to the reader to make sure they “get it.”

How Can We Share Info and Keep Up the Pace?

Stories are information, so we obviously need to share it with readers. *smile* But how can we prevent the story from losing momentum while we share it?

We should make the information…

Relevant to the Story

I’ve spoken before about making sure the information we’re sharing with the reader is relevant. Just because we discovered a cool thing during our research doesn’t mean it should be included in our story.

I typically include only about 5% of what I discover during research. Pages of research might result in only one sentence. We should only include information that’s actually needed by readers.

Timely to Current Story Events

Relevant can also refer to the timing of sharing information. Although it might be relevant to let readers know that the protagonist had a rough history with her father, she wouldn’t necessarily think about that fact while rock climbing on page one.

Instead, we should save that backstory information until it’s relevant to what’s currently going on in the story, such as when she checks her voice mail after her workout and finds a message from him.

Shown and Not Told

Both of the previous tips have to do with being judicious with our use of the pause button, but we can also eliminate the button sometimes. As I talked about with that info dump post above, we can show information instead of telling readers about it.

Showing tends to include more action, so the pause is less noticeable. Showing in a deep point of view also keeps the information in the character’s voice, which makes the insertion less noticeable as well.

Woven with Other Story Elements

Another way to make the pause less noticeable is to weave the information with our storytelling. That means that we mix the information with other elements of our story so that any information shared isn’t in a big chunk.

So if information is relevant, timely to current events, and shown and not told (if appropriate), let’s talk about how we can weave that information into our story on three different levels…

Scene-Level Weaving

Usually when we talk about weaving different elements together, we focus on smaller chunks, but I want to start here—at the scene level—to give a complete picture.

Our scenes need to have more than one reason to exist. If they have just one purpose, they’re not working hard enough to justify themselves, and they might, in fact, be a tangent that takes away from the point of our story.

As I’ve written about before, our scenes need to include at least three reasons to exist, such as: plot points, character goals, character development, conflict, stakes, etc. Ensuring that we’re weaving different purposes into a scene is the reason behind my Elements of a Good Scene Checklist (and Worksheet).

The Elements of a Scene Checklist is meant to help us identify when a scene isn’t pulling its weight for the story. When we spend a lot of words on unimportant things, we drag the pacing of our story down, and a scene that’s only an info dump will make our story stop dead in its tracks.

Conversely, if a scene moves forward a reader’s understanding of the story, the pace remains solid because there’s a feeling of forward momentum being driven by an all-encompassing purpose. In other words, a scene with a purpose prevents readers from feeling that the pause button has been pushed. *smile*

Paragraph-Level Weaving

The next level of weaving is making sure that we don’t have paragraph after paragraph of the same element in a row. Action, description, exposition, dialogue, internalization, etc. should all be used but not overused.

I often think in terms of a Two-Paragraph Guideline. We can switch between action, exposition, dialogue, internalization, etc. every two paragraphs (or so) to prevent reader boredom, pacing issues, and choppiness.

(Note that the two-paragraph guideline is just that—a guideline. *smile* It’s a reminder to use all the tools in our toolbox.)

We’ve heard that readers can follow three paragraphs of unattributed dialogue (assuming there are only two speakers), but after that, readers need a descriptive dialogue tag or an action beat to ground them in the scene again. On the other end, setting description can get boring after one paragraph. So two paragraphs of any one writing element in a row is a good guideline.

If we need more than two paragraphs of introspection, we might look at how we can mix in action. Is the character doing something while they’re thinking? Even better, can we make the action add to the scene by creating conflict or showing subtext?

Maybe a wife is thinking about leaving her husband while she’s folding laundry. Does she discover a lipstick stain on his shirt, and she decides that’s the last straw? Or does she take care in folding his clothes “just so” to prevent wrinkles, showing that she still cares about him?

Sentence-Level Weaving

At the sentence level, we can break information into sentences, or even just phrases, that are woven with other elements. These short insertions allow us to share information with a reader without calling attention to it.

Much of writing is about creating layers, and that’s what weaving is all about. We don’t have to paint the full picture of our settings, worldbuilding, or a character’s backstory (or any other potentially tricky element) all in one go.

For backstory, in chapter one, we might mention that the hero has a bad relationship with his father in a single sentence or phrase. In chapter three, we might reveal the detail about how long it’s been since they’ve spoken. In chapter eight, we might share the words of their last fight. Etc., etc.

Similarly for setting, at the start of every scene, we need to anchor readers within the setting. However, that doesn’t mean we should open every scene or chapter with a paragraph of setting description. Instead, we can include a phrase here and there.

In the same way, our world-building can be constructed one phrase or sentence at a time. Over time, they’ll give readers an impression of our world.

To illustrate, here’s the opening two paragraphs of my novel Treasured Claim:

Jewelry trickled through Elaina’s fingers, scattering reflections across the peeling linoleum of her bathroom floor. Each piece hinted at how she’d acquired it for her collection—a broken clasp on a silver chain, earrings missing their backs, a loose sapphire she’d rescued from a sink drain. But the precious ornaments lacked the satisfying clink of gold coins when they landed in the safe-box at her knees.

Humans didn’t make treasure like they used to. Such a shame.

Setting: Just two phrases—”peeling linoleum of her bathroom floor” and “they landed in the safe-box at her knees”—are enough for readers to visualize the scene. We see that she’s in a bathroom, that her bathroom is low-end (peeling linoleum), and that she’s kneeling in front of a safe-box of her treasure collection.

Backstory: We get that there’s something different about this character. Who is she that her linoleum is peeling, that her jewelry collection is made up of broken pieces (and she’s not bothered by that fact), and that she finds the clink of gold coins satisfying?

Worldbuilding: We understand from one short sentence—”Humans didn’t make treasure like they used to”—that she’s not human. Readers might also pick up on the subtext of how she values jewelry that humans wouldn’t, thinks gold coins are superior, and finds it a shame that humans’ concept of treasure has changed. If readers start thinking “dragon,” they also get the world-building hint that this dragon has fingers. Ahh. A shapeshifting dragon.

That’s a ton of information shared in four and a half sentences. Yet none of it interrupts the story flow, feels irrelevant, out of character, or outright told as an authorial interruption.

(Bonus Tip: We can use color-coding to check for paragraph or sentence-level weaving.)

Putting It All Together: Avoiding Info Dumps

Readers don’t mind backstory (even flashbacks), or anything else that could potentially hit that pause button, if the story flows and moves forward. That’s the key for including backstory, worldbuilding, or anything else in our story.

Backstory has a bad reputation because it’s often used so poorly. Writers include big chunks of information before a reader needs it (or is even curious about it), and the chunks don’t feel like they fit the story, character, voice, or point of view.

Avoiding problems requires us to include information in a smart what, when, and how way. We should share necessary information only when the reader needs it in a way that fits the story (and scene, paragraph, sentence, voice, point of view, character, etc.).

  • Relevant information doesn’t interrupt the story’s pace.
  • Timely information fits current events and keep the story’s flow.
  • Shown information feels active and true to the character.
  • Weaving information in layers gives readers what they need to know without dumping information all at once.

That said, we’re not likely to get this right in the first draft. First drafts are all about discovery, discovering the story and the flow of scenes. But when we begin revisions, we have to take a hard look at those info dumps and see where we can:

  • cut what’s not relevant,
  • move information to the scene where it’s needed,
  • change told information to shown information, and
  • weave information over layers of scenes, paragraphs, and sentences.

If we interweave those details with other elements, we’ll have a better chance to keep the natural flow of a scene and maintain our story’s pace. And all of that will help us keep our readers immersed in the story. *smile*

Have you read stories with too much info dumping of backstory, setting, worldbuilding, or other element? How could the authors have fixed the problem? Do you struggle with info dumps? What type of information is hardest for you to weave within a story? Does this post help, or do you have other questions?

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Carradee March 10, 2016 at 7:07 am

I think in terms of a “rule of two”, myself—a rule of thumb that applies to words, sentences, paragraphs, etc. I even try to keep it in mind for the number of participial/prepositional phrases or (in)dependent clauses in a sentence.

I usually summarize this rule of thumb as “More than 2 in a row is probably too many,” but the matter really is, “Do I have reason to have more than 2 in a row here? No? Then fix the balance here.”

A few weeks ago, I mentioned that I’m an expert in English grammar. This expertise is useful, but it has its downsides. One downside is that I can naturally understand—and, in part, write in—sentence pretzels that are logically and linguistically correct but that most folks wouldn’t understand.

Note that I’m not saying folks who don’t understand these sentences are stupid. No, I’m saying the sentences essentially need a level of expertise to be understood. And this is how I naturally think and write, in some contexts. Especially when distracted or tired.

When I later go back over the story, these sentence pretzels make sense to me, and there’s part of me that will very much want to keep them. I end up arguing with myself over, “But makes sense!” If that’s the only reason I can find to keep it there, I make myself change it to something simpler.

Another note: Not all information can be shown (ex. motivations), nor is “showing” inherently good and “telling” inherently bad. If you’re using the modern popular method of “close” PoV, you need more “showing” than “telling”—”telling” adds distance. But some styles and techniques (and contexts) need or warrant “telling” more than “showing”. That does impact your audience, though. 🙂


Jami Gold March 14, 2016 at 1:07 pm

Hi Carradee,

I often get notes back from my editors or beta readers that my sentences are too convoluted. Now, sometimes I might actually be assembling them wrong, but sometimes it’s just because *I* know what I mean. LOL! But yes, I change every one of those sentences to be simpler. 🙂

And you’re absolutely right that genre and style can make a big difference in how we balance the elements we weave together. 🙂 Thanks for the comment!


Lara Gallin March 10, 2016 at 8:50 am

I’m trying to be aware of info dumps. My WIP does have a lot of important backstory that I’m attempting to convey without actually saying it. When my MC was a child, she survived a car accident that killed her parents which is pivotal to her state of mind now. I’ve been introducing it bit by bit into the first chapter, first off by describing a large scar on her face, then by her telling her friend that she was going to visit her parents and starting the next scene in the cemetery. I’ve described their grave as being one that she narrowly avoided so we get an idea of what happened. The specific detail of there having been a car accident comes up as part of a conversation a couple of chapters later.

I’ve read some shocking info dumps over the last couple of years, the worst being when in order to introduce the history of a war, the writer put in a scene where the MC asks a computer for information on the enemy. The war was 1000 years old and he’d spent most of his life fighting it but he needed a potted history because, you know, reasons :-p


Jami Gold March 14, 2016 at 1:13 pm

Hi Lara,

I know I never get this right in the first draft. LOL! Thank goodness for revisions. 🙂

Oh, good examples! I like the visit/cemetery snippets you mentioned–very powerful way to show the past. Thanks for sharing!


Cathleen Townsend March 10, 2016 at 1:21 pm

This is an excellent review of the subject. I’ve beta read pieces before where nothing’s really wrong, but it lacks enough context to made the character’s actions relevant. A liberal balance is indeed the best way forward. I never heard it articulated quite like this, though, so thanks for sharing.


Jami Gold March 14, 2016 at 1:17 pm

Hi Cathleen,

Oh yes, context is tricky. We know what we mean, so it can be hard to see where we need to fill in. 🙂 Thanks for chiming in!


Kassandra Lamb March 10, 2016 at 3:49 pm

Thanks for this, Jami! “Layering” and “weaving” are going to be my new buzz words while I’m writing. 🙂


Jami Gold March 14, 2016 at 1:18 pm

Hi Kassandra,

Yay! I hope it helps. 🙂 Thanks for giving me the post idea!


Christina Hawthorne March 10, 2016 at 5:43 pm

As you know, Jami (couldn’t resist 😉 ), you explained this so well I’m hard pressed to summon a comment. “Weaving” is the perfect word. When backstory is used with skill it becomes a powerful tool, but when done poorly it might as well begin with, “And now for the textbook portion of the story…”


Jami Gold March 14, 2016 at 1:18 pm

Hi Christina,

LOL! Well, said. 🙂 Thanks for the comment!


Scarlett West March 10, 2016 at 9:27 pm

Another informative article. I was working on this exact concept in my WIP. I appreciate how you share both what is helpful and NOT helpful with the information sharing.

Timing is the hardest part, as in figuring out how much to tell and when. This is going to take some practice to learn, but this was helpful.


Jami Gold March 14, 2016 at 1:22 pm

Hi Scarlett,

Yes, definitely practice–and also knowledge that we can fix things better in revisions, after we know the full scope of the story. 🙂 Thanks for the comment!


Glynis Jolly March 11, 2016 at 6:54 am

I’ve read and downloaded your sheets for improving scenes so I’m ready for that. However, the information on paragraph level and sentence level aspects in relationship to info. dumping I hadn’t really considered consciously before. This is good info., Jami. Thank you. I’ll be filing it with other posts I’ve kept from your blog.


Jami Gold March 14, 2016 at 1:25 pm

Hi Glynis,

I constantly learn and improve with these concepts all the time too. 🙂 Getting the balance right usually doesn’t happen until revisions. LOL! Thanks for the comment!


Serena Yung March 11, 2016 at 1:28 pm

Hey Jami,

Oh it’s good that you mention how any kind of story element, not just backstory or exposition, can become excessive. In the story I was writing yesterday, I just had three battles almost back to back, and even I thought that must be a bit tiring for the reader. Within each battle scene, though it was mostly action and dialogue (shouting commands to their Pokemon), there was a tiny bit of exposition and internalization, which may make the battles somewhat less exhausting to read—they are exciting but long, the full length type of battle with six Pokemon versus six opponent Pokemon. The exposition was usually just one or two sentences long, to explain a technicality that just happened. I expect my readers to know a fair bit about Pokemon, but not know THAT much, so I tend to fill them in on the relevant info, to save my readers the trouble of looking them up on Google every time.

Thus, I really need to work in down time scenes in between the battles, but at the same time, I don’t want these resting scenes to be boring filler. They should feel important to the story and give a sense that the story is still progressing overall. Interpersonal conflict and other interesting interpersonal happenings may help, preferably if they don’t feel random.

Apart from that, I like how you divided the tips up into weaving it on the sentence, paragraph, and scene level!

I actually am very fond of reading backstories in other people’s books. Backstories make the characters more complex, dimensional, and real to me! Perhaps I’m even in the minority group of readers who would be okay with a sudden backstory dump, maybe partly because I read a lot of classics and many of them do precisely that, haha. But I have to keep in mind that many other readers don’t like the classics as much, so they may not be as patient with these dumps.

Btw Jami, remember what you said about traditionally published books rarely having sentences with leading participial phrases? Well imagine my surprise when I saw quite a number of these in Cassandra Clare’s newest book: Lady Midnight from the Dark Artifices series. It’s the sequel to her bestselling The Mortal Instruments series. Lady Midnight’s publisher was one of the Big Five, Simon and Schuster, too. Of course, I’m not implying that we should now indulge ourselves in using leading participial phrases, I’m just saying that I was very surprised to find so many in the book already, especially as I’ve only read 11% of the 720 page book so far.


Jami Gold March 14, 2016 at 1:35 pm

Hi Serena,

Exactly! It’s not that backstory is evil. 🙂

As you said, backstory helps our characters feel more complex and 3D. The problem with modern writing is letting backstory pause the storytelling. As long as we can avoid that, we’re good. 🙂

As far as leading participle phrases, some authors get so big that editors stop pushing them to improve or even to not rest on their laurels. Plus, I’ve seen a real drop-off in the quality and amount of editing some traditional publishers do. *shrug* I obviously don’t know if that’s the case here, but I’m no longer surprised by poor quality. :/ Thanks for stopping by!


Serena Yung March 15, 2016 at 12:35 pm

Thanks for the reply!

Hmmm I’m not sure if the leading participial phrase style in this book indicates low quality, though, as there were never times when a present participle modified the wrong noun, and these LPPs never bothered me either. 😀 I saw that sometimes, Cassandra Clare uses adverbs too, like “he said dispiritedly”. But again, I don’t think that means a poor quality of writing, because, as a reader, I like this kind of style (J.K. Rowling used this style too, so you could say I grew up with and became fond of it.) Actually, I think the writing is pretty good, in that it’s smooth, pleasant, and easy to read, and conveys the characters’ emotions very well. 😀

On the backstory topic, Lady Midnight had some “backstory inserts” right after a story event or a character thought that was related to this backstory. So it was timely and relevant, you could say. In fact, I adored the part when these two secondary characters kissed passionately, and the reader didn’t know where that was coming from, because we never knew there was anything romantic between them. But right after that kissing scene, we get this backstory section with narration and dialogues to explain how their romance started. It was obviously very emotionally charged, sweet, and poignant, and LOLLL this couple became my favorite couple in the story. XD. They are super romantic…

Onto another topic, what would you prefer reading? A romance where you see barely anything romantic between two characters and then suddenly seeing that they are lovers (though this is explained via backstory right afterwards). Or the type where you see tiny hints, even if ambiguous, that there might be something not so platonic between the characters, and later when they demonstrate their affection for each other, you think, “Aha! I suspected that it was so!” ?

Normally I would think the romance with the hints (or ambiguous hints) beforehand would be better, so we’re not too surprised. But in this case, the surprise was not unpleasant, and it was honestly a very exciting revelation to me, lollll. Moreover, a character who was previously uninteresting to me suddenly became fascinating, and now I think he’s my favorite character, haha.

If the author chose to give hints from the start, that would rouse our curiosity and make us happy when our questions are answered and our suspicions confirmed. But on the other hand, there’s something quite thrilling about seeing such an unexpected plot twist!

I don’t know. What do you think?


Julie Glover March 12, 2016 at 8:37 am

Love all your tips! Great stuff.

Two things that have personally helped me are:
(1) Knowing I will write some info dumps in the first draft to get the story going, but in edits I can cut those pages and tighten, tighten, tighten. I allow myself a bit of over-explaining in the first round, but not after that. If it’s “dumpy,” it’s got to go! (Great critique partners are also invaluable for pointing these out.)
(2) Thinking in terms of deep POV. If my character wouldn’t think it that way, I can’t say it. We don’t replay our backstories in our heads; rather, we reference tidbits here and there as they play into our current situation. I remind myself constantly to stay in the main character’s head — which helps me avoid those info dumps.


Jami Gold March 14, 2016 at 1:38 pm

Hi Julie,

Agreed completely about first drafts and critique partners (beta readers and editors too! 🙂 ). I never get the balance right the first time out, and often not the second time either. LOL!

Oh yes, love how you point out that just as we don’t think about our backstory all the time, our characters wouldn’t either. As you said, that’s where a deep POV approach can help so much. 🙂 Thanks for sharing your insights!


Ellie Holmes March 12, 2016 at 10:38 am

Fab tips to keep in mind. We can all stray so easily into the minefield of info dumps and only recognise it on a later read through. Sometimes we’re so wedded to the paragraph(s) we don’t even recognise them as info dumps until much later. I had a couple of examples of this in my latest work. One I realised on my own, another a beta reader pointed out to me (shudders that it had got that far!). Anyway I stripped them down to the bare essentials and then built the crucial information back in – weaving is a great way of putting it. The story was leaner and worked so much better. All the information stripped out wasn’t missed because the essence was still there. It’s an important lesson to learn. Thanks for covering this so thoroughly.


Jami Gold March 14, 2016 at 1:52 pm

Hi Ellie,

Yes, in my current WIP, I have to include some explanation that my character wouldn’t think about quite that way because she knows it already. I did my best to cut it to the bare minimum (a paragraph), weave in other things to make the section work harder, and keep it in her voice. We’ll see if that passes muster with my editors. 😉 Thanks for sharing your experiences!


Jim March 16, 2016 at 10:14 am

Thanks so much for this article! Totally agree that backstory is not evil–it just needs to be tied in to whatever it is the Author is trying to say with their story. Great tips on weaving elements too–shown information over told information. Yes!


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